Critique please: Essay - Horsetrack

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Hey guys,

I'd like to edit those down to a few, but frankly I'm unable to. Not that I like them all that much - quite the opposite - I just can't tell what works and what doesn't. Please quickly skim them and maybe jot down the numbers you dislike or don't seem fit. It's supposed to be a coherent essay once edited down to 10-15 images.

If you want to tell me why images don't work for you, I'd of course appreciate it, but I understand that it's quite time consuming.

As always, please be honest.

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Hi Martin,
They are all good (some better than others) in a technical sense. What Struck me as an Essay there was no big crowd, no excitement generated, no immediacy, no joy no sorrow. It would have looked for a big race , the horses comming to the finish line in a group. You know, dust,Dirt,Mud flying somthing that exemplifies action. All this from an old race horse auctioneer.
Bill
 
Sherwood44 said:
Hi Martin,
They are all good (some better than others) in a technical sense. What Struck me as an Essay there was no big crowd, no excitement generated, no immediacy, no joy no sorrow. It would have looked for a big race , the horses comming to the finish line in a group. You know, dust,Dirt,Mud flying somthing that exemplifies action. All this from an old race horse auctioneer.
Bill
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Thanks guys. I looked at the images again, and I can see there's a direction missing (adding to the mediocrity). I won't wrap the essay up, but keep on shooting. Maybe figure out what to look for first.

I'll take the images down, since posting them online is somewhat of a grey area.

I do really appreciate the comments!

martin
 
yoyo22 said:
I missed the photos. What specific reason you had for taking them down?
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Some were taken when I was there hanging out, but some I took with the permission of the company running the whole thing in a fenced off area. I'll go shoot there one more day, edit them down to ten and upload them again (if I'm allowed to, which, I'm sure, I am).

I actually thought about emphasizing the loneliness conveyed by some rather inconspicuous individuals participating in some heavy betting there, rather than action shots.

This picture I have in my mind is the guy who shows no emotions whatsoever, even when the crowd goes nuts. The kind of gambler whose addicted to the game. They are there, I just didn't capture them.

martin
 
martin s said:
Some were taken when I was there hanging out, but some I took with the permission of the company running the whole thing in a fenced off area. I'll go shoot there one more day, edit them down to ten and upload them again (if I'm allowed to, which, I'm sure, I am).

I actually thought about emphasizing the loneliness conveyed by some rather inconspicuous individuals participating in some heavy betting there, rather than action shots.

This picture I have in my mind is the guy who shows no emotions whatsoever, even when the crowd goes nuts. The kind of gambler whose addicted to the game. They are there, I just didn't capture them.

martin
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I liked that compulsive - driven feel, had a sense of intimacy that would be lost in a crowd ... you may be better picking a few you like, arranging them into a story and then trying to take some more to fill any gaps
 
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