a girl, in front of a wall

martin s said:
Hallo,

der Schatten auf der rechten, unteren Gesichtshälfte lässt das Gesicht unsymmetrisch wirken. vielleicht hättest du aus dieser Richtung noch einen Reflektor einsetzen sollen.
Ansonsten gefällt mir das Portrait sehr gut, vor allem die Farbgebung.

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Uwe
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danke für diese kleine erinnerung 😀
 
I don't like the styling very much. The straight cut in the jeans looks weird and the vest is just wrong.
Also, she's trying a bit too much, IMO. Get her to be more natural and pose less. She's a pretty girl but she's not a fashion model and the pose just makes it look like she's trying to be which ends up making her expression flat and empty (more so in the second, less so in the first). What do you find beautiful about her? Try to find out and then focus on that. Is it a smile? A half smile? Is it her profile? The thin hair at the back of her neck? Whatever it is, try to recreate situations where it shines through.
 
The first image could be in an Urban Outfitters Catalog. They tend to be muted colors, lower contrast. And often, mussed up Hair.

I like it.
 
First one looks over-sharpened to me.

I read a book on posing for portraits, and here is what I learned from that book:

Your subject should either be looking at the camera, or at something specific that the viewer can relate to, but not just looking away off into space. Take it fwiw, but I generally give my subjects something to look at like a toy or mouse or something.
 
swoop said:
This thread exemplifies what's wrong with internet critique. You'll get 50 different suggestions as to what you did wrong.
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Is that such a bad thing though ... I've seen a lot of people place images in the crtiquing forum only to have them all but ignored!

To the op and the image ... my criticism would mainly be one of composition. At the focal length chosen I would have been a couple of steps further forward or a few back. It's a bit sort of halfway for me! 🙂
 
swoop said:
This thread exemplifies what's wrong with internet critique. You'll get 50 different suggestions as to what you did wrong.
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it's exactly what i expect. I dont want to know what is good, I want to improve my skills and this only works if someone tells me what's wrong in the pictures.

To the op and the image ... my criticism would mainly be one of composition. At the focal length chosen I would have been a couple of steps further forward or a few back. It's a bit sort of halfway for me! 🙂
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1st picture?

I only have a 35 and a 85 lense. The first picture is 85 and the second 35...

thanks to the all the other.
 
nba said:
it's exactly what i expect. I dont want to know what is good, I want to improve my skills and this only works if someone tells me what's wrong in the pictures.



1st picture?

I only have a 35 and a 85 lense. The first picture is 85 and the second 35...

thanks to the all the other.
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Yes sorry ... I meant the first pic. I would either like to see more of her or less of her.

I like the muted colours though and don't really think the increase in contrast would benefit it at all. 🙂
 
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