RayPA
Ignore It (It'll go away)
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Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
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• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
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• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
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If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
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Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
Guidelines/Ground Rules
The thread has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in this thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image(s)
• Please abide by any thematic requirement (e.g., landscape, portrait, etc.)
•The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
You can also provide feedback on critique threads here:
Critique Feedback Thread
Remember: Please do not provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted.
This thread is now active, please follow the guidelines if you'd like to participate! Have Fun!
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kaiyen
local man of mystery
I'm in. I think. I'm still a bit unclear on the rules, but it seems like it's basically a discussion between 5 guys on just their own photos.
If I got that right, I'll throw my lot in there. And then get skewered, I'm sure. I love street photography, but I'm not so good at it yet.
allan
If I got that right, I'll throw my lot in there. And then get skewered, I'm sure. I love street photography, but I'm not so good at it yet.
allan
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I'm in
I'm in
I'd like to do this one, please
I'm in
I'd like to do this one, please
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
Ooo, ooo, pick me, pick me!
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
I try it again, count me in.
nikola
Well-known
i'm in toooooo
nikola
Well-known
Split, Croatia
Jupiter 8 on Fed 3b
Jupiter 8 on Fed 3b
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
kaiyen
local man of mystery
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Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
Ooops, looks like everybody's waiting for me. I'll post as soon as I get home (in about three hours?)
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
Sorry , folks, I just learned I'll be on the road for two days, got no time now, will comment later.
kaiyen
local man of mystery
I guess I'll start. Just on Nicola's for now, because it's late and I don't think I have the mental energy for more than one tonight 
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On the one hand, I do like the overall look, geometrically. Vertical shot, nice straight vertical lines, long, dramatic shadows. It's got a lot going for it that way.
High contrast is often associated with street photography, but I think this might do well with just a bit less. Or, perhaps, the people are small enough and the shadows so deep that I feel too removed from the actual people. It's a street shot, and I don't dispute that, but I personally like street shots that get in more on the subjects or have better shadow detail if you're farther away.
As always, it's easier to say the negative things than the positive ones. Or at least to articulate them. I do like the image a great deal. Just enough of the arch, and that shine on the brick really brings some power to the shot.
Perhaps I'll elaborate more when I'm a bit more awake later on.
allan
.On the one hand, I do like the overall look, geometrically. Vertical shot, nice straight vertical lines, long, dramatic shadows. It's got a lot going for it that way.
High contrast is often associated with street photography, but I think this might do well with just a bit less. Or, perhaps, the people are small enough and the shadows so deep that I feel too removed from the actual people. It's a street shot, and I don't dispute that, but I personally like street shots that get in more on the subjects or have better shadow detail if you're farther away.
As always, it's easier to say the negative things than the positive ones. Or at least to articulate them. I do like the image a great deal. Just enough of the arch, and that shine on the brick really brings some power to the shot.
Perhaps I'll elaborate more when I'm a bit more awake later on.
allan
kaiyen
local man of mystery
George,
Okay, so I'll do one more tonight.
First thought - too cluttered. Your subject is clearly the guitar player, but there are too many subjects there. I think you need to crop some of that other stuff out. The father and kid in the foreground just flat out need to go. The downside of cropping is that I'm not sure you'll have enough shadow detail in the face of the guitar player to make cropping worthwhile.
I apologize that this is an all negative post. But that's my first reaction. Perhaps you'd be willing to crop, dodge his face a bit, and post another one? I'd like to see it.
allan
Okay, so I'll do one more tonight.
First thought - too cluttered. Your subject is clearly the guitar player, but there are too many subjects there. I think you need to crop some of that other stuff out. The father and kid in the foreground just flat out need to go. The downside of cropping is that I'm not sure you'll have enough shadow detail in the face of the guitar player to make cropping worthwhile.
I apologize that this is an all negative post. But that's my first reaction. Perhaps you'd be willing to crop, dodge his face a bit, and post another one? I'd like to see it.
allan
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kaiyen said:
this is the best I can do - the MOST I will do. I agree that the two on the right are too much in the foreground, too prominent in the composition, but I kind of liked the shot because of this crowdedness - the fact that it was taken in a very crowded place and through a crowd when it parted only for a second, made the clutter and composition meaningful.
But, the crop ain't bad.
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nikola said:
It looks a little dark on my screen.
Very nice perspective on this scene, well composed. I think that it would have been more effective if the image were perfectly symmetrical, but the natural shape of the surroundings does contrast well with the divide down the middle and the motion of the people.
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fitzihardwurshd said:
From a compositional standpoint, this is a good shot. It has all the elements of nice geometry and balance. What it lacks is a definite subject. Perhaps the woman and child are hte subject(s)? They melt into the background because the tonality is very flat.
I think, if you were to curve the image to achieve some true blacks and whites, and then edit the subject till it stood apart from the background (dodge and burn), you will have strengthened the composition.
Actually, now that I look at this again. . .pretty obvious that the subject is the space between the man and the woman . . hard to say. . .I might have gotten closer to the man and used a wide lens to get some more angle on that inbetween space. I don't know. I get your idea, here, though.
Got it. At least, got something :
would be better shot from a lower standpoint. Lowest possible while still maintaining full body of the woman in the frame.
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kaiyen said:
Kaiyen, I can barely see your pic. Difficult to critique a pic of such small size!
Of course, this monitor is totally excessive.
I like the idea in this shot, but I feel like the foreground sucks up too much of the frame. this would have been better with less in the very immediate foreground. THe window is perfect because it adds a necessary aspect, but the far left. . . wreath? needs to go. Help wanted sign is a nice tough, though. I'd keep that. Combination of the sign and the emptiness of the place is a good show. Get rid of the neon bit on the top too.
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gabrielma said:
Immediately, I wanted that fountain to be a larger bit in the image. Just to get the whole thing in would have been nice, since the little girl is likely looking at it.
Matching socks and sails. Nice.
Paris?
Colors are very pleasing, well exposed. . . . makes me wonder what . . .film. . .is this? Looks almost like a slide film.
I do like how you placed the girl in the frame. She is just about perfect there.