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The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
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If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
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Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
Guidelines/Ground Rules
The thread has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in this thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image(s)
• Please abide by any thematic requirement (e.g., landscape, portrait, etc.)
•The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
You can also provide feedback on critique threads here:
Critique Feedback Thread
Remember: Please do not provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted.
This thread is now active, please follow the guidelines if you'd like to participate! Have Fun!
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nico
Well-known
Count me in!
Bye
Nico
Bye
Nico
sleepyhead
Well-known
I would like to be in - will upload a photo in about 12 hours - sorry for the delay.
Yaron
Yaron
raid
Dad Photographer
I am in too.
nico
Well-known
Bump!
nico.
nico.
raid
Dad Photographer
ampguy
Veteran
do you folks need a 5th?
sleepyhead
Well-known
Hi ampguy - YES, we need a 5th!
Yaron
Yaron
sleepyhead
Well-known
Hi Raid, is it possible to see a bigger version of your photo? Perhaps 1000 pixels across?
We still need ampguy to confirm that he's in.
Here's my photo. No title. Taken with a Minox 35ML.
We still need ampguy to confirm that he's in.
Here's my photo. No title. Taken with a Minox 35ML.
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nico
Well-known
ampguy
Veteran
OK, I'm in
OK, I'm in
Will need a few hours before I post.
OK, I'm in
Will need a few hours before I post.
sleepyhead said:
ampguy
Veteran
raid
Dad Photographer
sleepyhead said:
I would need to find this photo and scan it again.
Raid
ampguy
Veteran
Raid
Raid
Raid,
This photo is very interesting, took me a minute to figure out that the guy was not in a swimming pool. The blue swirls, rope, and shadow lines all indicate a swimming pool, but of course the guy in the suit makes it clear this is not, plus the chairs.
I'm guessing that the overhead roof is a big blue skylight?
Raid
Raid,
This photo is very interesting, took me a minute to figure out that the guy was not in a swimming pool. The blue swirls, rope, and shadow lines all indicate a swimming pool, but of course the guy in the suit makes it clear this is not, plus the chairs.
I'm guessing that the overhead roof is a big blue skylight?
raid amin said:
ampguy
Veteran
Sleepyhead
Sleepyhead
Great buildings on both sides, this can be a great photo as is, and I think it would be great without the lady's head in it as well.
I am not sure of the significance of capturing only the woman's eyes and noce and not mouth.
Perhaps you subcionsciously do not want to hear the voice of women??
Sleepyhead
Great buildings on both sides, this can be a great photo as is, and I think it would be great without the lady's head in it as well.
I am not sure of the significance of capturing only the woman's eyes and noce and not mouth.
Perhaps you subcionsciously do not want to hear the voice of women??
sleepyhead said:
ampguy
Veteran
Nico -- when she passes by
Nico -- when she passes by
Very high contrast moody photo. It's not clear what the guy is doing, just waiting I guess. The bench looks a little more modern than the huge pillars.
The guy looks like he could use a shave.
Nico -- when she passes by
Very high contrast moody photo. It's not clear what the guy is doing, just waiting I guess. The bench looks a little more modern than the huge pillars.
The guy looks like he could use a shave.
nico said:
sleepyhead
Well-known
Sleepyhead's comments
Sleepyhead's comments
Input From Sleepyhead On The Other's Photos:
PHOTO BY RAID AMIN
This a lovely photo - I also thought it was a swimming pool at first glance - and like I said I would have loved to see it bigger because there are so many interesting details to explore. Technically the photo is very good - good exposure and colours, it's sharp.
Compositionally, I would have liked to see more of those red cones, as they contrast so nicely with the blues. And the top left-hand corner is a bit distracting. Perhaps a vertical shot might have acheived what I'm asking for.
PHOTO BY MANGO
ManGo, your photo is a good example of how a simple subject can be turned into a striking composition. I like the fact the everything is lines and rectangles except the round shadow shape. The tonality is perfect - there are details on the wall and in the shade of the sign. It's difficult for me to suggest any way to improve on this photo, except perhaps to try to crop a little off of the right side and bottom in order to make the round shadow more centrally placed. Nice work.
PHOTO BY NICO
I like the photo for it's simple composition (i.e., lack of distractions), and because the naive viewer wonders "what is he watching?" The exposure has retained good detail in the bright part of the wall, but I would have liked to see more shadow detail around the guy's neck. The photo also seems alittle soft to me. See attached sharpened version. The sharpening to my eyes, seems to sharpen what the guy is intently looking at, if that makes sense!
PHOTO BY AMPGUY
Ampguy, I admire you for trying to capture this. It is one of those situations in which the subject would have caught my eye, but for the demanding technical and compositional reasons i wouldn't have even attempted it. The photo is a little too busy in my opinion, and may be improved by converting it to B&W. Moving the camera more to the right and down might have cleaned up the cluttered left edge and gotten more of the front wheel of the bike in.
Sleepyhead's comments
Input From Sleepyhead On The Other's Photos:
PHOTO BY RAID AMIN
This a lovely photo - I also thought it was a swimming pool at first glance - and like I said I would have loved to see it bigger because there are so many interesting details to explore. Technically the photo is very good - good exposure and colours, it's sharp.
Compositionally, I would have liked to see more of those red cones, as they contrast so nicely with the blues. And the top left-hand corner is a bit distracting. Perhaps a vertical shot might have acheived what I'm asking for.
PHOTO BY MANGO
ManGo, your photo is a good example of how a simple subject can be turned into a striking composition. I like the fact the everything is lines and rectangles except the round shadow shape. The tonality is perfect - there are details on the wall and in the shade of the sign. It's difficult for me to suggest any way to improve on this photo, except perhaps to try to crop a little off of the right side and bottom in order to make the round shadow more centrally placed. Nice work.
PHOTO BY NICO
I like the photo for it's simple composition (i.e., lack of distractions), and because the naive viewer wonders "what is he watching?" The exposure has retained good detail in the bright part of the wall, but I would have liked to see more shadow detail around the guy's neck. The photo also seems alittle soft to me. See attached sharpened version. The sharpening to my eyes, seems to sharpen what the guy is intently looking at, if that makes sense!
PHOTO BY AMPGUY
Ampguy, I admire you for trying to capture this. It is one of those situations in which the subject would have caught my eye, but for the demanding technical and compositional reasons i wouldn't have even attempted it. The photo is a little too busy in my opinion, and may be improved by converting it to B&W. Moving the camera more to the right and down might have cleaned up the cluttered left edge and gotten more of the front wheel of the bike in.
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raid
Dad Photographer
sleepyhead said:
The face should not be cropped like this. I wouldn't know how to improve this photo after it has been taken.
Raid
raid
Dad Photographer
nico said:
Nico,
This photo improves when you crop it from the left.
Raid
nico
Well-known
Raid:
great effect, the colour is brilliant and the character makes the photo. A lot of interesting details to look at. The shot is ok for me, at least a little cropping on the right, in order to decentrate the man and on the left to cut out the upper left corner. A great shot.
ManGo:
this is the classical shot you like it at all or nothing at all! I belong to ones that like it. It's essential, well composed and exposed. It's very difficult to suggest something about it.
Ampguy
I think it's a funny shot (it makes me smile) but maybe a little more oof for the background and a little cropping would help cutting away some distractions.
Sleepyhead:
Intriguing shot, building and sky make me think about a rainy day in an industrial town. Imho, the "half" head adds sort of mistery to the shot, who's she? where she going? or thinking about? even for this one is very difficult to suggest an improvement ....
Bye
Nico
great effect, the colour is brilliant and the character makes the photo. A lot of interesting details to look at. The shot is ok for me, at least a little cropping on the right, in order to decentrate the man and on the left to cut out the upper left corner. A great shot.
ManGo:
this is the classical shot you like it at all or nothing at all! I belong to ones that like it. It's essential, well composed and exposed. It's very difficult to suggest something about it.
Ampguy
I think it's a funny shot (it makes me smile) but maybe a little more oof for the background and a little cropping would help cutting away some distractions.
Sleepyhead:
Intriguing shot, building and sky make me think about a rainy day in an industrial town. Imho, the "half" head adds sort of mistery to the shot, who's she? where she going? or thinking about? even for this one is very difficult to suggest an improvement ....
Bye
Nico