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My offering

My offering

Canon EF
Canon FD 50mm 1:1.4 S.S.C.
Kodak BW400CN @ 320

Thanks for looking.
 

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Girl and Window

Girl and Window

Here is mine ....


Camera: Yashica GSN
When: Last week.
 

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Foolproof

Foolproof

foolproof said:
think we can go - heres mine :


foolproof: The three people have an interaction going on between them. The policeman on the loef has his arms behind his back, indicating his patience or attempt to have partience. The second policeman is not concerned; he looks sideways. The young man's face is clearly illuminated while the background is all black. I like it. This is a story telling image to my eyes.


Raid
 
Gabriel

Gabriel

gabrielma said:
Here's mine:

Leica M6, 35mm CV Ultron, med. yellow filter, Ilford XP2


Gabriel: The photo looks too flat and too dark on my monitor. What should be standing out ? There is not enough definition that gets through to me.

Raid
 
Wayne

Wayne

venchka said:
Canon EF
Canon FD 50mm 1:1.4 S.S.C.
Kodak BW400CN @ 320

Thanks for looking.

Wayne: I love the pool table scenario, but there is a distracting broom like background to the left of the lady.

Raid
 
Rafael

Rafael

Rafael said:
Here's mine (M4, 50/2 Summicron, Kodak BW400CN).


Rafael: The image is fine as is, but I am wondering how to make it stronger now after the photo has been taken.The elbows of the man on the right are distracting from the interaction between man and woman on the left. Maybe crop from the top down and to the man's waistline [on the right]. The other option is to let the two men corner the photo and to crop out the girl from the left. This photo would be interesting when taken vertically with the man on the right totally in. Anyways, this is a good image.

Raid
 
Foolproof: Very interesting image. I agree with Raid, this shot really tells a story. I particularly like the way you have framed the boy's head in between the two police officers and against the black background. One has to be very careful shooting images of police officers these days. I know how little time one has to get shots like this. So, given the circumstances, I think that you have done particularly well to get this shot.

My primary quibble is with the inclusion of the boy's jacket in the image. I know there was probably very little that you could have done about that. But I do find it distracting. Moving a little bit to your left might have allowed you to hide the jacket behind the policeman's legs. But I am not sure. Anyway, very nicely captured image.


Wayne: I really like this one. The diagonal composition is very strong. And your exposure seems to be quite good, especially given the difficult lighting situation. Her hand is a little bit blown out. But there is still plenty of detail there. And you have managed to capture great tones and detail on her face and back. Her expression is also great and, for me, actually makes the shot.

I think that I might have gone for a slightly longer lens here. The large out of focus portion at the bottom of the frame is a bit distracting. The longer lens would have eliminated the distractions in close to the camera. Alternatively, you could just crop out the very bottom of this image. Come to think of it, the best crop might be a square (very close to what you have for your avatar). Yes, take the bottom off of your avatar in order to square it up and I think you have my favourite crop of this image. Anyway, well done. I think you have a real winner here.


Gabriel: It took me a few moments to get it. I spent more time with this image than with any other in the thread. But I really quite like this image. It has a very calm feeling to it which is, of course, accentuated by your inclusion of the word "Stillwater" on the trolley car. I really like the angles in this shot. They give the viewer the feeling that he or she is entering a new place. I also really like the lighting and the tones you've captured here. This looks like a dusk shot, a personal favourite of mine.

My biggest complaint centers on your inclusion of the bright spot in the middle of the frame (a light maybe?). I think that you could easily have tucked it in behind the second trolleycar. Of course, maybe then you would not have gotten the straight on shot of that car. But I actually doubt it. In any case, I do find the light to be bothersome. Otherwise, I really like the image. In fact, I find myself liking it more and more the more I look at it.


Raid: This shot reminds me a lot of the image you entered in the critique forum a few weeks back. Is it taken at the same window? In any case, I like this one infinitely better than the last. Your daughter is so photogenic! And the lighting here is sensational. My eye goes straight to the wonderful expression she has on her face. Great shot!

For the most part, I think that your composition is very good. But I do have one quibble (don't I always?) It does bother me to see the flagpole on the wall growing out of the back of your daughter's head. It was difficult to avoid. I know that you do not pose your daughters for these shots. And hey, there are a lot of flagpoles on that wall!! Still, a tiny step to your right would have placed your daughter's head between the two poles. Apart from that little complaint though, I really like this shot.
 
Foolproof's picture

Foolproof's picture

You do find interesting subjects on the street.

I hope the young lad isn't in deep fertilizer. Those GARDA guys look big! You used their location to good advantage to make them look bigger and the "civilian" much smaller. Good job! Don't see anything I would change.
 
Rafaels' Street musicians

Rafaels' Street musicians

As a photograph it's technically precise. I'm an old dog. I'm just becoming aware of the whole notion of "street photography". I suppose I squandered 30+ years of opportunities in the French Quarter in New Orleans. My brain is more tuned in to the natural world. I think I would like to know more about the parts you don't show.
 
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