Critique #56 *Portrait* 5 Participants
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🙂 Ok, first to join first to comment:
Shiro_Kuro:
what a mistery in this portrait, there are so many questions to be asked: why the cream/paint/make up on the face, why is naked, what place is this and – most of all – the expression. What are the the thoughts behind these eyes? About the tecnical elements, I like dof and composition; good exposure too. So I think this one works as it is and would not change anything ... oh sorry, did I tell you that i like it? 🙂
JeffGreene:
🙂 Very nice portrait. I like the way he’s looking at you, seems like watching from a window. You caught an interesting expression, it makes me think he’s a curious and intelligent man. I like light/exposure work, there are a lot of details (hair and beard) shown. Only the jacket in the left is a little bit distracting so it’s the only thing I’d change in the photo.
Raid:
She resembles your daughter Dana! Ehm, ... sorry 🙂, I like this “family” portrait, she has a sweet smile and and a hint of complicity in her expression. I also like the hairs, it makes me think about a windy day on the beach. Nice exposure and colours. As possible suggestion or alternative, I’d like to see a square version with tighter cropping on the right (and consequentially on the sky above)
EmilGil:
i like it, beatiful portrait of a beatiful young lady. I like her dreaming expression, and the pose is quite natural. I also like the unusual point of view you choose. I also like tones and skin texture.
The only thing I’d like to see is more contrast between the dress and the background. 🙂
Ciao
Nico
Shiro_Kuro:
what a mistery in this portrait, there are so many questions to be asked: why the cream/paint/make up on the face, why is naked, what place is this and – most of all – the expression. What are the the thoughts behind these eyes? About the tecnical elements, I like dof and composition; good exposure too. So I think this one works as it is and would not change anything ... oh sorry, did I tell you that i like it? 🙂
JeffGreene:
🙂 Very nice portrait. I like the way he’s looking at you, seems like watching from a window. You caught an interesting expression, it makes me think he’s a curious and intelligent man. I like light/exposure work, there are a lot of details (hair and beard) shown. Only the jacket in the left is a little bit distracting so it’s the only thing I’d change in the photo.
Raid:
She resembles your daughter Dana! Ehm, ... sorry 🙂, I like this “family” portrait, she has a sweet smile and and a hint of complicity in her expression. I also like the hairs, it makes me think about a windy day on the beach. Nice exposure and colours. As possible suggestion or alternative, I’d like to see a square version with tighter cropping on the right (and consequentially on the sky above)
EmilGil:
i like it, beatiful portrait of a beatiful young lady. I like her dreaming expression, and the pose is quite natural. I also like the unusual point of view you choose. I also like tones and skin texture.
The only thing I’d like to see is more contrast between the dress and the background. 🙂
Ciao
Nico
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Shiro_Kuro:
Excellent tonality and texture. Arresting image, the eyes really grab you, loss, sadness! Superb! Great bokeh!
Raid:
Attractive woman, I do alot of 6X6 myself. I don't think color adds much here!. Compositionally I might crop the photo so she isn't so central. I'd go B&W.
EmilGil:
Great image, love the way the tree frames and draws attention to her face. Good composition, rich creamy grey tones. I might spend some time burning in the upper part of the white scarf on her head a bit as it tends to get lost in the background. Your age and ability depress me! :<)
Nico:
Spot on asymmetrical composition. Love the angle you captured and the sparkling vitality you've captured in her eyes and mouth. Great image! The shadow frames her face beautifully!
Excellent tonality and texture. Arresting image, the eyes really grab you, loss, sadness! Superb! Great bokeh!
Raid:
Attractive woman, I do alot of 6X6 myself. I don't think color adds much here!. Compositionally I might crop the photo so she isn't so central. I'd go B&W.
EmilGil:
Great image, love the way the tree frames and draws attention to her face. Good composition, rich creamy grey tones. I might spend some time burning in the upper part of the white scarf on her head a bit as it tends to get lost in the background. Your age and ability depress me! :<)
Nico:
Spot on asymmetrical composition. Love the angle you captured and the sparkling vitality you've captured in her eyes and mouth. Great image! The shadow frames her face beautifully!
raid
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shiro_kuro said:
shiro-kuro: This is an interesting image, as pointed out by others. Is she standing in front of the regrigerator with the door open? Her face looks sad. Why? The backdrop does not contribute to make the image stronger.
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EmilGil said:
Emil: I like this photo. The shallow depth of field used makes it OK to have a busy background. The laces on her shoes are a nice feature. The muscles in her arms look also nice. Her face has a creamy complexion, along with deep looking eyes.
Raid
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nico said:
Nico: This again is an interesting composition including a theatrical expression with a tilted perspective and lots more. I like it.
Raid
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JeffGreene said:
Jeff: This is a successful image. The backdrop is not sharp, which makes the face three-dimensional. The ladder offers an interesting framing from below.
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EmilGil
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Raid: I certainly don't mind you tweaking my image a little bit, I might even drop it into the toner myself next time I find a darkroom =)
When it comes to comments:
JeffGreene: Nice contact with your model and well placed between the lighter parts of the background. The exposure is there and the shallow depth of field isolates him nicely from the books behind. Unlike Nico, I like the dark left corner. I think books only would have drawn the attention from his calm face and curious eyes. Unfortunately my eyes seek the sharper part of the face, the ears.
Shiro_kuro: The first thing I thought was "war paint?" Fantastic look in her eyes, caught totally unprepared in a pretty private moment (where no woman expects or wishes to have her picture taken!). Exposure is correct and focus as well but print contrast slightly low? I do find the upper bottle hats a bit too light, catching my eyes slightly too often.
Raid: Warmth and friendship, this girl knows you and trusts you (I gather from previous posts that she is your daughter?), gazing out over the beach. Exposure is spot on with plenty of detail in the black jacket while avoiding blown out clouds. On the downside, I'd like to see just a bit more of her left eye, not covering it fully with hair. The colour of her eyes is so similar to the one of her hair that I find it slightly difficult to separate the two.
Nico: This was the hardest one, I don't know where to begin. A slightly surprising angle that works very well with good contact between the two of you. The lighting is also unconventional but works equally good. Not the first setup of my choice, was I to take the portrait of an elderly woman but it definately works, especially placing her in the darker part of the background. Her hand and glasses nicely fill a void that would have taken a very large part of the image otherwise. Exposure is fine, but slightly out of focus.
When it comes to comments:
JeffGreene: Nice contact with your model and well placed between the lighter parts of the background. The exposure is there and the shallow depth of field isolates him nicely from the books behind. Unlike Nico, I like the dark left corner. I think books only would have drawn the attention from his calm face and curious eyes. Unfortunately my eyes seek the sharper part of the face, the ears.
Shiro_kuro: The first thing I thought was "war paint?" Fantastic look in her eyes, caught totally unprepared in a pretty private moment (where no woman expects or wishes to have her picture taken!). Exposure is correct and focus as well but print contrast slightly low? I do find the upper bottle hats a bit too light, catching my eyes slightly too often.
Raid: Warmth and friendship, this girl knows you and trusts you (I gather from previous posts that she is your daughter?), gazing out over the beach. Exposure is spot on with plenty of detail in the black jacket while avoiding blown out clouds. On the downside, I'd like to see just a bit more of her left eye, not covering it fully with hair. The colour of her eyes is so similar to the one of her hair that I find it slightly difficult to separate the two.
Nico: This was the hardest one, I don't know where to begin. A slightly surprising angle that works very well with good contact between the two of you. The lighting is also unconventional but works equally good. Not the first setup of my choice, was I to take the portrait of an elderly woman but it definately works, especially placing her in the darker part of the background. Her hand and glasses nicely fill a void that would have taken a very large part of the image otherwise. Exposure is fine, but slightly out of focus.
raid
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Emil: This is a photo of my wife six years ago. I took several photos, and the hair was moving with the wind in each photo.
Raid
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Raid: Warmth and friendship, this girl knows you and trusts you (I gather from previous posts that she is your daughter?), gazing out over the beach. Exposure is spot on with plenty of detail in the black jacket while avoiding blown out clouds. On the downside, I'd like to see just a bit more of her left eye, not covering it fully with hair. The colour of her eyes is so similar to the one of her hair that I find it slightly difficult to separate the two.
Raid
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Raid: Warmth and friendship, this girl knows you and trusts you (I gather from previous posts that she is your daughter?), gazing out over the beach. Exposure is spot on with plenty of detail in the black jacket while avoiding blown out clouds. On the downside, I'd like to see just a bit more of her left eye, not covering it fully with hair. The colour of her eyes is so similar to the one of her hair that I find it slightly difficult to separate the two.
nico
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Wow, lots of fun and useful tips reading your comments.
Raid, I think your experiments are interesting so feel free to try new versions of my photos 🙂.
From your critiques I had a couple of toughts I'd like to share with you right after Charley's comment.
Ciao
nico
Raid, I think your experiments are interesting so feel free to try new versions of my photos 🙂.
From your critiques I had a couple of toughts I'd like to share with you right after Charley's comment.
Ciao
nico
shiro_kuro
Charles Bowen
Raid that looks great ...i really like the added contrast ... and is very close to what I originally wanted .....seems my version lost something on the upload ....as for the crop I agree about the busy background but I like the space ....I do not like to crop my images when I ask for critique ,that way I get really good composition feedback... my wish is to be able to take the shot as intended ..as seen through the range-finder ....not against croppingraid said:
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@Emil...Beautiful portrait ,the lit eyes and her expression are wonderful ,use of DOF ..everything is really well done ..... What if you placed more of the tree behind her as to separate her from the white sky ? More of a question than a critique as it seems you spent sometime setting up this shot...... which leads me to my next comment which might seem a bit like i am nit picking ...but it does seem like you spent sometime setting up this shot and I feel a few details where missed that take a way from this portrait ...the unbuttoned portion of her dress .....and the way her fingers grasp her leg makes me feel like her position is not comfortable an maybe a bit unnatural for her her ... something about the way she is sitting does not convince me ...
shiro_kuro
Charles Bowen
@Raid.... Beautiful color ..she looks so natural .... as it is this is a great shot ... maybe a bit closer .... I love the wind blowing her hair and the surroundings.. on the side of critique ... I really do not feel a connection to her .. I miss the eye contact ...she seems a bit distant to me .... maybe that was your intent , a moment between you and her ...
raid
Dad Photographer
Charley,
I wanted to show my wife in touch with Nature around her. I liked the hair blowing in her face and I asked her to leave her hair as it is and not to adjust it. Women typically adjust their hair in such situations and I always ask them not to. I like nothing to be staged.
Raid
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Raid.... Beautiful color ..she looks so natural .... as it is this is a great shot ... maybe a bit closer .... I love the wind blowing her hair and the surroundings.. on the side of critique ... I really do not feel a connection to her .. I miss the eye contact ...she seems a bit distant to me .... maybe that was your intent , a moment between you and her ...
I wanted to show my wife in touch with Nature around her. I liked the hair blowing in her face and I asked her to leave her hair as it is and not to adjust it. Women typically adjust their hair in such situations and I always ask them not to. I like nothing to be staged.
Raid
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Raid.... Beautiful color ..she looks so natural .... as it is this is a great shot ... maybe a bit closer .... I love the wind blowing her hair and the surroundings.. on the side of critique ... I really do not feel a connection to her .. I miss the eye contact ...she seems a bit distant to me .... maybe that was your intent , a moment between you and her ...
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