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Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
Guidelines/Ground Rules
The thread has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in this thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants.
• Please, only join this thread if you are able post an image within 24 hours of joining.
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image(s)
• Please abide by any thematic requirement (e.g., landscape, portrait, etc.)
•The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photos should be standard screen resolution (72~90) and the longest side of the image approximately 10 inches in length.
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
What's a Guest?
A guest is a participating member of the thread who does not need to post a picture. The guest is an exception to the guideline that states all participants must post an image. Guests provide criticism just as the other participants do. Guests are also encouraged to act as moderators, to encourage elaboration, to guide discussion and examine latent concepts brought about as a result of the discussion.
Note: Not all threads will have a guest. See the title/subject line for the '+Guest' designation.
If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
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Critique Feedback Thread
Remember: Please do not provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted.
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sf
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I want to do this one. Been a while since I've been on one of these. Should be interesting since i have no idea if I even have one of these images.
RayPA
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Let's try a Nature theme. Looking for not necessarily landscape images. For example, wildlife (flora & fauna), etc. It's OK to stretch the theme a bit if you need to.
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jmilkins
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OK. I'll play! Hmmn , what nature- themed image have I got from an RF....
PlantedTao
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RayPA
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PlantedTao said:
That's Ok. We'll let you off the hook on this one, since it's your first critique.
Yes, next time post after you get 5 participants. sf
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RayPA said:That's Ok. We'll let you off the hook on this one, since it's your first critique.
whoops. Me too. Sorry! I am still in the game here, but deleted my post. Just because I'm neurotic tonight.
shiro_kuro
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ampguy
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I'll play.
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jmilkins
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ampguy
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um. . .
anyone going to post pics? I think we need two more to begin talking.
anyone going to post pics? I think we need two more to begin talking.
shiro_kuro
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(my photo is on page one...i jumped the gun )
Shiro_kuro
A interesting take on the theme. I like how nature (bird) is surrounded by the chaos of man made structures. The tones are very good. The composition is helped my the tilt of perspective and all the lines in the photo.
However, the bird is hard to make out on top of pole. Waiting until the bird offered a profile, or was in flight would have allowed us to get a better sense of the bird. This would have given stronger connection to the viewer to grasp the connection between the elements present in the photo.
Shutterflower
I like the graphic elements presented in the photo...the light bands really draw you in. I like how it is a duck that is the main focus mixed in with the winged rats. The composition is good and as I said is really helped by the great graphic quality...
I would try to take the contrast down a lil' bit, and get a bit more detail in the highlights, which would show the duck a little better too.
ampguy
Great animal photo...not typically my favorite type (animal portrait), but in this photo I like how my attention is drawn to the feathers which gives the photo great texture against the nice bokeh of the background. I think a bit more detail could be added to the top of the head. Nice composition which keeps your eyes focused on those feathers.
jmilkins
very cool use of the wide angle...I love the tones that were achieved in this photo, very nice. Nice subject, that from far away almost looks like fireworks. I would burn in you upper corners a bit more to give it that feel of night sky (nic rich blacks) and to rid of any distractions so your view is right at the center of the photo going out. A great subject that I have photographed before but nothing ever came of it...nothing close to this anyway. Great job and I bet this would look great in print.
great job everyone...cheers.
Jason
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(my photo is on page one...i jumped the gun
)Shiro_kuro
A interesting take on the theme. I like how nature (bird) is surrounded by the chaos of man made structures. The tones are very good. The composition is helped my the tilt of perspective and all the lines in the photo.
However, the bird is hard to make out on top of pole. Waiting until the bird offered a profile, or was in flight would have allowed us to get a better sense of the bird. This would have given stronger connection to the viewer to grasp the connection between the elements present in the photo.
Shutterflower
I like the graphic elements presented in the photo...the light bands really draw you in. I like how it is a duck that is the main focus mixed in with the winged rats. The composition is good and as I said is really helped by the great graphic quality...
I would try to take the contrast down a lil' bit, and get a bit more detail in the highlights, which would show the duck a little better too.
ampguy
Great animal photo...not typically my favorite type (animal portrait), but in this photo I like how my attention is drawn to the feathers which gives the photo great texture against the nice bokeh of the background. I think a bit more detail could be added to the top of the head. Nice composition which keeps your eyes focused on those feathers.
jmilkins
very cool use of the wide angle...I love the tones that were achieved in this photo, very nice. Nice subject, that from far away almost looks like fireworks. I would burn in you upper corners a bit more to give it that feel of night sky (nic rich blacks) and to rid of any distractions so your view is right at the center of the photo going out. A great subject that I have photographed before but nothing ever came of it...nothing close to this anyway. Great job and I bet this would look great in print.
great job everyone...cheers.
Jason
jmilkins
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PlantedTao : Environmental Statement
This is a subtle but powerful image that really hits when I look at it more closely. The oil on the water would look more confronting at first in colour I’m sure, but in monochrome it’s a moment before you recognise the oil. This just adds to the impact of the image I think. . A sad sight (just 1 litre of oil can pollute a million litres of water) but a good capture.
Compositionally, I like where you’ve placed the duck – on one of the “thirds” and moving into the picture. It makes one even more concerned for the bird as it moves further into the slick. Well done.
Ampguy : Eagle
The texture and sharpness of this image really stands out. Great focus on the the bird’s eye, but enough DOF to allow the neck ruff to really stay in focus, while allowing pleasant bokeh. Those neck feathers give such texture to the image. The picture conveys a sense of alertness and raw nature very well!
Compositionally, I would perhaps suggest including more of the bird’s body, and less space above it’s head. Not sure if you used an AF camera – When I do I find myself forgetting to recompose with portraits where I’ve used AF to focus on the eye – result – to much space above the head….
George/ Shutter flower Duck crossing.
I really like this! It’s just absurdly humorous to me- a photographic take on the old why did the chicken cross the road joke….but with a duck – cracks me up for some reason. Everything about It- even the raised leg of the duck in step and it’s quizzical look. No chickens, only pigeons and an inquisitive duck. Funny funny funny.
Compositionally, I think you’ve got the decisive moment perfectly – that duck step, the position of it on the white line. It is certainly a very busy scene with all the lines form the bricks. I might have tried to crouch down so the angle was a little different (a ducks eye view) and the white line at the top of the image wasn’t right at the top. But the moment is more important that the finer points of composition in this shot. Great stuff.
Shiro_Kuro / Nature shot.
I find this image interesting. It challenges my perception of “Nature” - I couldn’t immediately see any element in the photo I could say was “natural”. It’s an urban jungle kind of shot. This is of the great things about the international nature of RFF - Coming from Australia, with only a small population compared to Japan it seems we have a different perception of the concept. That’s fine – it makes me ponder what “nature” means to a person living in Japan. Thanks for the different viewpoint.
Compositionally, it is a busy, confused image that sits well with the hustle and bustle of city life. I look at this image and think noise and confusion and sounds bouncing around off hard surfaces. It make me appreciate what I would call nature even more i.e. wilderness and open space, and this makes it an effective, if very subtle nature photo! Thank you! (P.S. It was only on reading the other posts that I even recognised the bird – that shows how unobservant I am, but also how much the sense of non-naturalness (for me) overwhelmed me.
This is a subtle but powerful image that really hits when I look at it more closely. The oil on the water would look more confronting at first in colour I’m sure, but in monochrome it’s a moment before you recognise the oil. This just adds to the impact of the image I think. . A sad sight (just 1 litre of oil can pollute a million litres of water) but a good capture.
Compositionally, I like where you’ve placed the duck – on one of the “thirds” and moving into the picture. It makes one even more concerned for the bird as it moves further into the slick. Well done.
Ampguy : Eagle
The texture and sharpness of this image really stands out. Great focus on the the bird’s eye, but enough DOF to allow the neck ruff to really stay in focus, while allowing pleasant bokeh. Those neck feathers give such texture to the image. The picture conveys a sense of alertness and raw nature very well!
Compositionally, I would perhaps suggest including more of the bird’s body, and less space above it’s head. Not sure if you used an AF camera – When I do I find myself forgetting to recompose with portraits where I’ve used AF to focus on the eye – result – to much space above the head….
George/ Shutter flower Duck crossing.
I really like this! It’s just absurdly humorous to me- a photographic take on the old why did the chicken cross the road joke….but with a duck – cracks me up for some reason. Everything about It- even the raised leg of the duck in step and it’s quizzical look. No chickens, only pigeons and an inquisitive duck. Funny funny funny.
Compositionally, I think you’ve got the decisive moment perfectly – that duck step, the position of it on the white line. It is certainly a very busy scene with all the lines form the bricks. I might have tried to crouch down so the angle was a little different (a ducks eye view) and the white line at the top of the image wasn’t right at the top. But the moment is more important that the finer points of composition in this shot. Great stuff.
Shiro_Kuro / Nature shot.
I find this image interesting. It challenges my perception of “Nature” - I couldn’t immediately see any element in the photo I could say was “natural”. It’s an urban jungle kind of shot. This is of the great things about the international nature of RFF - Coming from Australia, with only a small population compared to Japan it seems we have a different perception of the concept. That’s fine – it makes me ponder what “nature” means to a person living in Japan. Thanks for the different viewpoint.
Compositionally, it is a busy, confused image that sits well with the hustle and bustle of city life. I look at this image and think noise and confusion and sounds bouncing around off hard surfaces. It make me appreciate what I would call nature even more i.e. wilderness and open space, and this makes it an effective, if very subtle nature photo! Thank you! (P.S. It was only on reading the other posts that I even recognised the bird – that shows how unobservant I am, but also how much the sense of non-naturalness (for me) overwhelmed me.
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Planted Tao,
I think, for this theme, that certain aspects of this shot do very well. The marbling in the water and the undulations caused by the duck are interacting in a way that hints at the mathematical dimension of nature.
Also, of course, is the impact the slick on the water probably has on the wildlife in the area. Beautiful to see and horrible to understand.
tonally, this image is pretty much perfect. I would find it hard to comment on the composition.
jmilkins,
Great use of the 15mm, for sure. The angle you chose on the subject is excellent, exposure and composition are great. The choice of lens for this shot was ideal. Would not have worked at all with a normal field of view. I particularly enjoy the contrast between the central plant on those in the background, etc. Is this the natural vignette from the 15mm?
ampguy,
I never think of rangefinders when I see headshots of birds (just seems like something for SLRs), but this is a nice show of lens performance. Super sharp, great colors and tones. And this is really an angle on the bird that is rarely taken. Usually we don't get the over the shoulder shot. Was this with a rangefinder? Is this a hawk? Looks like the red tailed hawks we use to have in the hills in southern California.
shiro_kuro,
My first impression when I saw this image was "where's the nature in it?", but upon close inspection I saw the bird perched on the top of that pole, and that made it for me. I really like how hidden the nature is in the complex tangle of the unnatural. The grid backdrop of the bricks is icing on the cake. Nicely done.
I think, for this theme, that certain aspects of this shot do very well. The marbling in the water and the undulations caused by the duck are interacting in a way that hints at the mathematical dimension of nature.
Also, of course, is the impact the slick on the water probably has on the wildlife in the area. Beautiful to see and horrible to understand.
tonally, this image is pretty much perfect. I would find it hard to comment on the composition.
jmilkins,
Great use of the 15mm, for sure. The angle you chose on the subject is excellent, exposure and composition are great. The choice of lens for this shot was ideal. Would not have worked at all with a normal field of view. I particularly enjoy the contrast between the central plant on those in the background, etc. Is this the natural vignette from the 15mm?
ampguy,
I never think of rangefinders when I see headshots of birds (just seems like something for SLRs), but this is a nice show of lens performance. Super sharp, great colors and tones. And this is really an angle on the bird that is rarely taken. Usually we don't get the over the shoulder shot. Was this with a rangefinder? Is this a hawk? Looks like the red tailed hawks we use to have in the hills in southern California.
shiro_kuro,
My first impression when I saw this image was "where's the nature in it?", but upon close inspection I saw the bird perched on the top of that pole, and that made it for me. I really like how hidden the nature is in the complex tangle of the unnatural. The grid backdrop of the bricks is icing on the cake. Nicely done.
ampguy
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Very interesting photo of a bird in oil polluted water. I think it makes a clear statement about the environment, but where was it taken, and how did the water get polluted? My eyes wander around the photo trying to see patterns in the oily water, then back and forth to the bird. I wonder how it would look with darker waters or oil spots?
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Very interesting photo of a bird in oil polluted water. I think it makes a clear statement about the environment, but where was it taken, and how did the water get polluted? My eyes wander around the photo trying to see patterns in the oily water, then back and forth to the bird. I wonder how it would look with darker waters or oil spots?
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At first I thought this was fireworks, or fiber optic strands. I wonder how you photographed grass with a black background? with flash at night? It's an interesting angle, and good nature shot. Looks very 3 dimensional.
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At first I thought this was fireworks, or fiber optic strands. I wonder how you photographed grass with a black background? with flash at night? It's an interesting angle, and good nature shot. Looks very 3 dimensional.
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nice contrast of birds in a man made structure with natural elements of lighting and shadows captured in parallel lines. There's a lot of elements and business in this photo, I think it might work well with the top third or half cropped out focusing on the closest bird in the light.
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nice contrast of birds in a man made structure with natural elements of lighting and shadows captured in parallel lines. There's a lot of elements and business in this photo, I think it might work well with the top third or half cropped out focusing on the closest bird in the light.
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