OurManInTangier
An Undesirable
Jon has urged me to take up arms, well fingers at least, and type my way to victory with a winning critique thread just like his successful 'Most Recent' critique thread.
So, "Your Forum Needs You" ( mustachioed man points finger sternly toward you,) so if you would like to join this merry band of brothers step forward and let it be known.
All you need to do is provide an image that you think fits the bill and follow the guidelines below. The topic is something we all do, all of the time but how can we capture that which is done both privately, alone with our thoughts and shared with 90'000 others, the topic is Watching/Viewing - any questions let me know.
Hopefully we'll have some volunteers...and someone that can tell me how to put a clickable thumbnail in and not simply the link that I seem destined to always provide!
Guidelines:
original author is raypa...
Welcome to the critique forum.
Please read the purpose statement and the guidelines/ground rules regarding participation.
Purpose
The primary purpose is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
The forum has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in a thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image
• The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
So, "Your Forum Needs You" ( mustachioed man points finger sternly toward you,) so if you would like to join this merry band of brothers step forward and let it be known.
All you need to do is provide an image that you think fits the bill and follow the guidelines below. The topic is something we all do, all of the time but how can we capture that which is done both privately, alone with our thoughts and shared with 90'000 others, the topic is Watching/Viewing - any questions let me know.
Hopefully we'll have some volunteers...and someone that can tell me how to put a clickable thumbnail in and not simply the link that I seem destined to always provide!
Guidelines:
original author is raypa...
Welcome to the critique forum.
Please read the purpose statement and the guidelines/ground rules regarding participation.
Purpose
The primary purpose is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
The forum has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in a thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image
• The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
ClaremontPhoto
Jon Claremont
Well done.
Clickable thumbnails:
Write a few words in the text box just like any post,
then click on button 'Go Advanced' below where you've typed,
you'll get more icons above the text box,
look for the paper clip icon top row slightly right of center click,
choose a photo and upload,
then click on 'Submit Reply' below the text box.
Clickable thumbnails:
Write a few words in the text box just like any post,
then click on button 'Go Advanced' below where you've typed,
you'll get more icons above the text box,
look for the paper clip icon top row slightly right of center click,
choose a photo and upload,
then click on 'Submit Reply' below the text box.
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David Noble
Established
OK, I'll play. I like the idea of these threads—something to talk about other than gear!
einolu
Well-known
ok i'm in, i have a shot that i took in april that i think fits the bill,
i will try my best to comment constructivly on other peoples photos
i will try my best to comment constructivly on other peoples photos
OurManInTangier
An Undesirable
Excellent - just need another two volunteers and we can upload our images.
Jon - Thanks for the advice, I'll follow your instructions and hopefully be able to get away from the links.
Jon - Thanks for the advice, I'll follow your instructions and hopefully be able to get away from the links.
shadowfox
Darkroom printing lives
Simon, I'm in!
This is exciting to me because it's my first joining this kind of thread.
Le'ts go!
This is exciting to me because it's my first joining this kind of thread.
Le'ts go!
OurManInTangier
An Undesirable
shadowfox said:
Good to have you "in," it's actually only the second one I've been a part of and the first I've started.
One more for the full set and we can begin...
David Noble
Established
Maybe a bump is in order?
OurManInTangier
An Undesirable
Maybe its a tricky or too vague topic....another hefty kick back up the board.I'm out until tonight but I'll check back as soon as I can.
Monz
Monz
Simon, if there is still space, count me in.
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OurManInTangier
An Undesirable
David Noble
Established
Monz
Monz
einolu
Well-known
shadowfox
Darkroom printing lives
shadowfox
Darkroom printing lives
OurManInTangier:
Positives: What a timing! I love how you captured the silhouette (kind of) of the horse and the rider at a beautiful moment. This is one of those pictures that captures your eyes through shape and contrast. Good tonality also.
Constructive: The foreground is a bit bland. Were the two people not wearing grayish hats, we probably can see hair texture or head shape that will complement the horse and the rider. Secondly, I can't believe that I said this, but the bokeh is "too nice", a harsher bokeh would probably lend more sense of movement.
David Noble:
Positives: Lovely moment, I like the blur on the dad as if he's hurrying his daughter. What a cute little girl, I have one around that age, so I know. Love the scarf around her neck. Ambience-wise, it's contrasty and sharp. I love the Japanese Kanji on the shop sign.
Constructive: The background is a bit too busy. I wish I can shove the guy inside the store because his back is distracting . One suggestion is to take this picture from the girl's eye-level. That probably would emphasize the attention to the girl staring into the store.
Monz Ahmed:
Positives: What a warm moment. Everyone is looking at the baby. I love the textures, they are sharp. My favorite is the expressions on the three kids closest to the Mom and the baby. Good tonality and brightness control. Would love to know what film is this.
Constructive: I am so tempted to suggest cropping the picture to exclude the two kids on the extreme left and right. But if I like the two, I'll keep them in. The silhouette of the boy's head on the left kept drawing my eyes towards it and not towards the center of the picture.
Einolu:
Positives: Nice, solitary moment. I like the slight vignetting on the edges because it draws me into the figure. The picture is almost monochrome because of the magenta tint and the *very* clean sky. I kinda like it.
Constructive: The small figures at the beach are kinda distracting, especially the guy (I assume) in the pink. Also, my eyes kept wanting to pan the scene to the right, to see what the lonesome figure is looking at. That tells me that maybe this picture will work better if the figure is more to the left. That would also leave less empty space on the foreground.
End of comments.
Thank you all for allowing me a glimpse of your world. It is an honor to have a say or two about these lovely pictures.
Will
Positives: What a timing! I love how you captured the silhouette (kind of) of the horse and the rider at a beautiful moment. This is one of those pictures that captures your eyes through shape and contrast. Good tonality also.
Constructive: The foreground is a bit bland. Were the two people not wearing grayish hats, we probably can see hair texture or head shape that will complement the horse and the rider. Secondly, I can't believe that I said this, but the bokeh is "too nice", a harsher bokeh would probably lend more sense of movement.
David Noble:
Positives: Lovely moment, I like the blur on the dad as if he's hurrying his daughter. What a cute little girl, I have one around that age, so I know
. Love the scarf around her neck. Ambience-wise, it's contrasty and sharp. I love the Japanese Kanji on the shop sign.Constructive: The background is a bit too busy. I wish I can shove the guy inside the store because his back is distracting
. One suggestion is to take this picture from the girl's eye-level. That probably would emphasize the attention to the girl staring into the store.Monz Ahmed:
Positives: What a warm moment. Everyone is looking at the baby. I love the textures, they are sharp. My favorite is the expressions on the three kids closest to the Mom and the baby. Good tonality and brightness control. Would love to know what film is this.
Constructive: I am so tempted to suggest cropping the picture to exclude the two kids on the extreme left and right. But if I like the two, I'll keep them in
. The silhouette of the boy's head on the left kept drawing my eyes towards it and not towards the center of the picture.Einolu:
Positives: Nice, solitary moment. I like the slight vignetting on the edges because it draws me into the figure. The picture is almost monochrome because of the magenta tint and the *very* clean sky. I kinda like it.
Constructive: The small figures at the beach are kinda distracting, especially the guy (I assume) in the pink
. Also, my eyes kept wanting to pan the scene to the right, to see what the lonesome figure is looking at. That tells me that maybe this picture will work better if the figure is more to the left. That would also leave less empty space on the foreground.End of comments.
Thank you all for allowing me a glimpse of your world. It is an honor to have a say or two about these lovely pictures.
Will
Monz
Monz
Thanks Will. Are we waiting for one more participant to join /post a picture?
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shadowfox
Darkroom printing lives
Eh, Monz, there are 5 pictures and 5 participants, in my count, at least.
Monz
Monz
Sorry Will, I miscounted! Here are my comments:
*OurManInTangier:
Nice capture and timing. I like the sharpness of the two figures in the foreground contrasted against the motion blur and out of focus nature of the jumping horse. Good exposure with detail maintained in the sky.
I would like to see a little more space on the left of the horse and a little less on the right, thus giving the horse some room to run into.
*David Noble:
Nice night shot and composition. I like the "power triangle" created by the three main figures in the picture. The little girl looking into the doorway adds mystery.
The girl’s father(?) is blurred (probably due to a necessarily long shutter speed) and (a little) too near the edge of the frame.
*Einolu:
Nice composition and colours. I like the position of the horizon one third of the way down from the top and the fact that it is exactly horizontal. The wall leads the eye into the picture and to the sitting figure. The other smaller figures and the dog add context and interest.
Perhaps the sitter should be a fraction to the left or a small strip should be cropped off the left of the frame so that she is also obeying the "rule of thirds."
*Shadowfox:
A mysterious picture: what is the woman looking at? Where is she for that matter? Good range of tones. I like the way that she is framed by the trees.
I would have liked her a little to the right in the frame and in sharper focus.
Thanks chaps for sharing. All the best.
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*OurManInTangier:
Nice capture and timing. I like the sharpness of the two figures in the foreground contrasted against the motion blur and out of focus nature of the jumping horse. Good exposure with detail maintained in the sky.
I would like to see a little more space on the left of the horse and a little less on the right, thus giving the horse some room to run into.
*David Noble:
Nice night shot and composition. I like the "power triangle" created by the three main figures in the picture. The little girl looking into the doorway adds mystery.
The girl’s father(?) is blurred (probably due to a necessarily long shutter speed) and (a little) too near the edge of the frame.
*Einolu:
Nice composition and colours. I like the position of the horizon one third of the way down from the top and the fact that it is exactly horizontal. The wall leads the eye into the picture and to the sitting figure. The other smaller figures and the dog add context and interest.
Perhaps the sitter should be a fraction to the left or a small strip should be cropped off the left of the frame so that she is also obeying the "rule of thirds."
*Shadowfox:
A mysterious picture: what is the woman looking at? Where is she for that matter? Good range of tones. I like the way that she is framed by the trees.
I would have liked her a little to the right in the frame and in sharper focus.
Thanks chaps for sharing. All the best.
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einolu
Well-known
Here we go, I will try to focus only on the things that you as a photographer were in control of when taking the picture.
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OurManInTangier:
Great moment! I like the pleasant tones, they go well with the overall softness of the photograph. A wonderful image. My only criticism would be that the composition feels very tight. I think more room around the horse and a little bit more of the spectators could be helpful to the image, though I don't know if you had the opportunity to back up at all or the like.
David Noble:
Good shot, I like the moment and the warm feel of the inside of the building. The way the little girl is frozen in the middle of the frame goes well with the movement of the dad. Can't think of anything to criticize. I myself might have done a horizontal composition just because I feel it would create a more natural frame for the scene.
Monz Ahmed:
Great light in this image, very soft and warm. Goes perfectly with this scene. A wonderful family photo, can't see anything to criticize. I guess that’s a bad thing for a critique.
shadowfox:
A good moment, I like the way the woman is turning her head away and the slight motion blur. I am a little confused by what the black area to the left of her face is, which distracts me from the subject. Also I wish that the background was a little less in focus which would go better with the slight blur of the woman, but that's just my take on it.
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I am no good at these things.
I think we only start an open discussion after everyone offers their initial views, correct?
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OurManInTangier:
Great moment! I like the pleasant tones, they go well with the overall softness of the photograph. A wonderful image. My only criticism would be that the composition feels very tight. I think more room around the horse and a little bit more of the spectators could be helpful to the image, though I don't know if you had the opportunity to back up at all or the like.
David Noble:
Good shot, I like the moment and the warm feel of the inside of the building. The way the little girl is frozen in the middle of the frame goes well with the movement of the dad. Can't think of anything to criticize. I myself might have done a horizontal composition just because I feel it would create a more natural frame for the scene.
Monz Ahmed:
Great light in this image, very soft and warm. Goes perfectly with this scene. A wonderful family photo, can't see anything to criticize. I guess that’s a bad thing for a critique.
shadowfox:
A good moment, I like the way the woman is turning her head away and the slight motion blur. I am a little confused by what the black area to the left of her face is, which distracts me from the subject. Also I wish that the background was a little less in focus which would go better with the slight blur of the woman, but that's just my take on it.
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I am no good at these things.
I think we only start an open discussion after everyone offers their initial views, correct?
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