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I need to use one of these photos to illustrate

The road north from town takes you past the New Port and then the marina in Gouvia Bay, it has spectacular views north east to Albania and the islands that bask in the straights between. Today the coast road is a well maintained road that winds up to the north east, Kassiopi and the northern resorts.
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this is the facing page if it matters

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what do you think? I do hate doing landscapes!
 
The first one is a real classic, Stewart - one of those I wish I had taken. I am following your book on flickr, BTW.

Cheers,

Roland.
 
many thanks Roland, praise indeed.

i think i do too, but I'm losing my perspective now, plus I'm useless with landscape
 
I vote for number one as well, in part because it is my favourite of the two (classic is a good adjective), and in part because it shows the road. I'm off to check out the rest of the book.
 
I agree with everyone else, number one. I find the foreground very distracting in No. 2. Gawd I wish I was there.
 
thank you everybody!

that far south the Golden hour only lasts 35min so i was just snapping and wishing

the full galley proof so far is here if anyone's interested the book what I wrote

Mods, if the link is inappropriate please delete it
 
The second is certainly a nice enough photo. I am not sure either really shows everything the narative states. But I am in agreement with the others that somehow, the first just seems more pleasant. If the second doesn't show something important to the book or narative, go with the first.
 
Ok, I'm in the minority, I like no.2 :)
The sky draws you in, and the more you look at it, the more you see. It's a good contrast with the shot in the opposing page (glad you clued us in on it :) )

No.1 is striking, but then I just gloss over it.

On the side, what software are you using to build your book, Stewart?
 
shadowfox said:
Ok, I'm in the minority, I like no.2 :)
The sky draws you in, and the more you look at it, the more you see. It's a good contrast with the shot in the opposing page (glad you clued us in on it :) )

No.1 is striking, but then I just gloss over it.

On the side, what software are you using to build your book, Stewart?
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I'm working in photoshop, then saving as .psd and a .jpg both full bleed pages, then loading in full complete page into blurb, that way they can't claim any intellectual rights to the layout.

I've printed a draft, and this is a galley proof that an editor friend has kindly offered to kick into shape for me, it should be finished in the naxt few years :rolleyes:

it turned into a bit of a monster
 
Sparrow said:
I'm working in photoshop, then saving as .psd and a .jpg both full bleed pages, then loading in full complete page into blurb, that way they can't claim any intellectual rights to the layout.
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Yeah, I'm building a book that I hope I can use as a portfolio using BookSmart (Blurb) also. Haven't thought about the layout intellectual rights you mentioned above.

I'm also thinking to create a layout from scratch using a DTP software like Scribus. Because the layout of a photobook doesn't have to be that complicated, but BookSmart is very convenient to use.

What choices, eh? :)
 
You might want to get a proofreader to go over the manuscript before you finalize it, sparrow. There are a lot of punctuation errors and a spelling error just in that one short paragraph.

Nice photos for sure though!
 
mabelsound said:
You might want to get a proofreader to go over the manuscript before you finalize it, sparrow. There are a lot of punctuation errors and a spelling error just in that one short paragraph.

Nice photos for sure though!
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Thanks, I must have got the first draft there, it’s been re-written once since then and I’m hoping to have a professional editor kick it into shape anyway this is the galley-proof
 
IMHO there are a couple of grammar errors in the passage above.

I'd query the capital N & P in New Port.
I think straights should be straits.
And probably a comma between "Albanians" and "an echo".

But I only got as far as O Level English. :)
 
Yeah, "straits" is what I meant, and there are several comma splices (using a comma to separate independent clauses, which is fine on the internet or in a novel, as an effect, but it reads like an error in nonfiction) and some awkward phrases and usage problems. "The coast road is a well maintained road that winds up to the north east," for instance, should read "The coast road is well maintained and winds up to the northeast." Or possible "winds upward," if by "winds up" you mean that it circles around as it rises in elevation, as opposed to meaning "terminates." "Well-maintained" needs a hyphen IF you use it as an adjective, but you don't need it if you reforumlate the sentence as I have...and "northeast" is one word.

Sorry to be so pedantic--I do this for a living! A professional editor is a good idea...with a project like this, you want to put your best face forward.
 
I would have been dyslexic, but it wasn't allowed at my school back then.

Any help is appreciated but it will be edited before it goes to print. New Port is the name of the place not simply a port built after the other one.
 
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