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Roman
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My comments:
-) Open up at least two more stops - the background is much to focussed and is really distracting.
-) Frank has got it right - you need ONE stronger lightsource (and that could very well be your Vivtar 285, maybe hooked up parallel to a second, similar type of flash, or one of those lamp-socket slave flash thingies you mentioned previously)), slightly of axis and slightly above eye-level, and diffused (you are shooting a bride - she should look all bright and fluffy and warm, etc., not contrasty and sinister, with lots of strong shadows on her face) - if you don't have a white umbrella that you could fix to the tripod (if you don't want to buy a special device for that, just use duct tape!), just shoot through some white silk or whatever you have; forget about the hairlight, without modelling lights it is very hard to judge the results, just have an assistant (i.e. your wife) hold a reflector (i.e. a large piece of white styrofoam or cardboard) to get some light onto the hair.
I have plenty of pics I took of my clients with a setup like that, but unfortunately I am not allowed to show those publicly (it is against the privacy rules in our organization) - I asked the friend who I did the light for for shooting a book cover, to send me that image, because unfortunately I don't have it on my computer, but I will post it if he sends it to me - that pic. was shot exactly with a setup like I mentioned...
Roman
-) Open up at least two more stops - the background is much to focussed and is really distracting.
-) Frank has got it right - you need ONE stronger lightsource (and that could very well be your Vivtar 285, maybe hooked up parallel to a second, similar type of flash, or one of those lamp-socket slave flash thingies you mentioned previously)), slightly of axis and slightly above eye-level, and diffused (you are shooting a bride - she should look all bright and fluffy and warm, etc., not contrasty and sinister, with lots of strong shadows on her face) - if you don't have a white umbrella that you could fix to the tripod (if you don't want to buy a special device for that, just use duct tape!), just shoot through some white silk or whatever you have; forget about the hairlight, without modelling lights it is very hard to judge the results, just have an assistant (i.e. your wife) hold a reflector (i.e. a large piece of white styrofoam or cardboard) to get some light onto the hair.
I have plenty of pics I took of my clients with a setup like that, but unfortunately I am not allowed to show those publicly (it is against the privacy rules in our organization) - I asked the friend who I did the light for for shooting a book cover, to send me that image, because unfortunately I don't have it on my computer, but I will post it if he sends it to me - that pic. was shot exactly with a setup like I mentioned...
Roman