Critique #34 *Open Theme* 5-Participants

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I'd like to play again. That makes 5?


I'll go ahead and post the first picture.

85mm, 2.0, Tri-X +2 at 1600 in microphen. Homeless kids in Brasov, Romania.
 

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Blues Man

Blues Man

Here is my image. It is a different photo of this street musician than the one I have posted earlier in one of he RFF critique sessions.

Location: The French Quarter in New Orleans (Louisiana, USA)
Film: Fujichrome 100
 

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Here is mine.

Roxanne-2.gif


Wayne
 
Wayne:
Great glamor shot, classic cheesecake. Looks like you got the exposure right on, great tone. the shadow detail is great. The slight softness to the image is appropriate to the subject. The composition is not traditional but works very well.
 
jvx

jvx

jvx said:
I'd like to play again. That makes 5?


I'll go ahead and post the first picture.

85mm, 2.0, Tri-X +2 at 1600 in microphen. Homeless kids in Brasov, Romania.


jvx: Did you on purpose make the photo soft or was it a limitation of the lens for close-focus? The expressions on the fcaes of these two boys are wonderful. Great photo.

Raid
 
nico

nico

nico said:
Here is mine:
"Barber shop"
BessaR+Nok50+IlfordHp5
Bye
Nico


Nico: The photo is cluttered with too many items and busy background. I don't like the space on the right side (walkway). The barbershop theme is very nice though.

Raid
 
Kevin (kmack)

Kevin (kmack)

kmack said:
Ok, Bingo at the Ruritan Club.

Kevin: The photo is good. The man's look at you is nice [eye contact] . The grain is OK in such a shot. So what is not OK? I would say that the top 20% of the photo is not so great. The woman's head is chopped off. There is a white band on the top.

Raid
 
Wayne

Wayne

Wayne R. Scott said:
Here is mine.

Roxanne-2.gif


Wayne


Wayne: Technically, this photo is very well executed. There are some white spots on the black material on the right. The woman's back is arched in a unnatural way, unless I am mistaken and it is a part of the pose.

Raid
 
Nico: Technically it is soft, out of focus, too dark, no central identifying theme. The balance of dark to light holds this together, to me it is like a glimpse through a window at night, an impression. In other words: I think that it works. You may want to try toning this one. A heavy selenium tone or sepia to see how it would look.

Gutsy shot, good call, it reminds me somewhat of the works of Josef Sudek.
 
jvx: Missed by that much....
The general focus does not bother me too much, if you could have gotten the eyes on the right in sharper focus it really would have worked a lot better. Composition is nice and tight. Exposure is fine. I would have extend the black border on the top and bottom to match the border on the sides.
 
Raid: This may be a function of my monitor but I had to kick the gamma down about 25%. As I originally saw it in my browser it was way too dark, it was hard to distinguish the subject from the background. Once I downloaded your image and reduced the gamma your photo really popped. Nice bokah in the background behind the subjects head, nice sharp photo. The composition seems a little cramped I think he needs a little more "elbow" room.
 
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