RayPA
Ignore It (It'll go away)
By request a thematic critique thread
Welcome to this critique thread. Please read the purpose statement and the guidelines/ground rules regarding participation.
Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
Guidelines/Ground Rules
The thread has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in this thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image(s)
• Please abide by any thematic requirement (e.g., landscape, portrait, etc.)
•The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
You can also provide feedback on critique threads here:
Critique Feedback Thread
Remember: Please do not provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted.
This thread is now active, please follow the guidelines if you'd like to participate! Have Fun!
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Welcome to this critique thread. Please read the purpose statement and the guidelines/ground rules regarding participation.
Purpose
The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.
Guidelines/Ground Rules
The thread has very specific rules regarding participation. The one basic rule is that you cannot provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted. To post an image to this thread you must be a participant. Participation in this thread is limited. Here are the guidelines and ground rules for participation:
• Participation in this thread is limited to 5 photographers
• Participants join the thread by posting their intention. You can simply reply with your intent to join by posting something like: "I'm joining," "I'm in," or just state your name
• Joining is on a "first come, first served" basis. The first 5 to reply become the participants
• Once the thread has 5 participants, no other photographers can join or participate in the thread
• Once the thread is full of participants all photographers will upload their image(s)
• Please abide by any thematic requirement (e.g., landscape, portrait, etc.)
•The number of photos for each participant is limited to one
• Photographers attach photos as thumbnails (no inline images or links)
• Photographers post their images supplying titles (if any) and other pertinent information (the amount of information should be minimal)
• Photographers can only comment on their own images and reply to comments only when everyone else in the thread has posted their comments on the image
• Every participant must comment on every photo (except their own—initially)
• Every participant must make at least two comments, one positive comment, and one constructive criticism (which is actually two positive comments)
• Once every photographer has commented then a free flowing discussion begins. It is at this point that every photographer can comment on their own work and reply to comments, ask questions, etc.
• The participants decide when the thread closes.
If you'd like to participate in a critique thread and need some ideas about how to proceed with viewing images critically, you may find this thread helpful:
How do you look at photos
You can also provide feedback on critique threads here:
Critique Feedback Thread
Remember: Please do not provide criticism on an image or comment in a critique thread unless you also have an image posted.
This thread is now active, please follow the guidelines if you'd like to participate! Have Fun!
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fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
So I am, nobody else ?
T
Todd.Hanz
Guest
allright...me too!
Todd
Todd
W
wlewisiii
Guest
I'll bite on this one.
William
William
raid
Dad Photographer
I'm in. ???
raid
Dad Photographer
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
How about me. I'm game. Ooops. I can count sometimes. I'm not (in). 
W
wlewisiii
Guest
T
Todd.Hanz
Guest
I'll defer to you Gabriel if you like.
Todd
Todd
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
Todd has very kindly deferred, but I'll wait for the next one. Maybe when I'm in Texas next time we'll thumb wrestle it out... Like I said: my bad, I can't count.
Thanks, Todd.
Thanks, Todd.
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
OK, Todd gave me a wet willy, and I had to say "yes" to make him stop.
So here's my entry...
EDIT: (forgot to put my own comments) --- This is a hand-held, nonstudio, rangefinder shot. It's at the lens' minimum focusing distance (~ 0.7m). Used a Leica M6 and 50mm Summilux-M (pre-asph) lens. Available light. No post-processing, no posing. I wanted to get the subject "as-is" (she's leaning on the counter).
Scanned from the negative.
So here's my entry...
EDIT: (forgot to put my own comments) --- This is a hand-held, nonstudio, rangefinder shot. It's at the lens' minimum focusing distance (~ 0.7m). Used a Leica M6 and 50mm Summilux-M (pre-asph) lens. Available light. No post-processing, no posing. I wanted to get the subject "as-is" (she's leaning on the counter).
Scanned from the negative.
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fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
fgianni
Trainee Amateur
Why I am always late?
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
wlewisiii said:
William,
I really like this one ! Unususal perspective and POV, the lines running towards the kid make the idea round. Outstanding, in a truely creative sense, not in the sense of "experimental" !
At first I thought this small portion of green at the upper edge would be distracting, but but for the clour concept this works fine. For me this photo is really good, without any restriction.
Fitzi
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
gabrielma said:
Gabriel,
Though the crop is not my personal taste ( I would chose it wider , with the hands, or closer) I find it a well done portrait anyway, mostly because of the facial expression, this Lady really LOOKS at ME !
That is perfect.I would smoothen the lower lip a bit and try to get all that much red out of the photo, the face and the ears got way too much of it.
Fitzi
fitzihardwurshd
Spiteful little devil
raid amin said:
Raid,
tho this is an interesting photo it is surely not a portrait in the sense of the photographical category we all know. So don't get me wrong, but I can't comment on it.
Fitzi
raid
Dad Photographer
Should I change my posted image?
Raid
Raid
raid
Dad Photographer
fitzihardwurshd said:
Fitzi,
Was kann Ich denn da sagen?
I have changed the posted image to be more traditional in nature.
Raid
Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
The placement of the boy here in accordance with his gaze is good. Perhaps if you cropped out the grass on the top of the frame, there'd be a more uniform background, and the lines of the court would make the composition stronger, for it would also make the eyes (ours, the viewers') see this in diagonals (from the top right corner to the boy and his gaze; the court's painted lines from the top left corner to the bottom right, etc.)wlewisiii said:
All in all I like that you did not place him in the center and used the background too to work with the direction of his eyes.
If I may say this (I don't know if this is considered positive critiqueing, I think it is, but Ray, tell me if that's not what we're looking for) I think this one is a very good candidate for B&W, with some medium contrast.
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Gabriel M.A.
My Red Dot Glows For You
fitzihardwurshd said:This is mine , a scanned print, IMHO some weak points but one good point, curious to learn how others will judge it !
I really like the catchlights, and the angle of the head, as well as the choice of angle and height. It's unfortunate that the background makes your choice of square crop immediately look like it is disproportionate, which is evidently an illusion; I would have chosen a "portrait" crop (as opposed to "landscape") rather than the square one given the background.
Had all of the sweater's neck, been in the frame, the crop would not feel a little too close. Having the left shoulder off the frame like that may have been helped if a bit more from the chest were in, or less from what is shown now.
The apparent use of a long focal length (given the background blur, and difference in sharpness from one side of the neck to the other) is a good choice, and you have effectively brought the eyes in "the plane of focus".
Overall the good points overweigh the weak ones, and the subject's expression is so well rendered that it makes it hard to "complain". I really like how the expression was captured and how you focused on the eyes given the angle of the subject.